Thread: New! STB: 2523-2524 (WIP)
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Default 10-22-2013 		  #6
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Alright, I re-read the STB from the start, and I must say that this flows very well. I am realty enjoying this thus far. I won't drop any spoilers in my comments, but I will say that I have always been a huge fan of people dealing with really heavy stuff while under extreme pressure. I can say that you have executed this very well, and I really can feel Jacob's strife with the whole matter.

Jacob is basically a noob in this STB. He has ziltch experience, short of some basic training. I really liked how you portrayed Jacob less as a bloodthirsty new recruit, and more like an uneasy and unsure soldier. This fact alone really sold me on this STB. You did a really good job on part 2. Kudos. I look forward to part 3.

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